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It is common for people to travel long distance for work and study.Some argue that longer commute times affect people in a negative way while others disagree. Discuss bothe views and give your opinion.

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Introduction
Some people argue that longer commute times harm individuals,
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 others believe they have few real drawbacks.
This
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 essay will discuss both views, but I believe the negative effects are more significant.
Body paragraph 1
On the one hand, a long commute can damage both health and productivity. Crowded buses and trains are often uncomfortable, and the constant movement can make some passengers feel car sick. Even those who feel fine may arrive exhausted.
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, a student who spends two hours on public transport each morning may struggle to concentrate in the first class, and an employee may work less efficiently for the rest of the day. Over time,
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 daily fatigue can reduce both performance and general well-being.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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, a long commute is not entirely wasted time. Passengers on trains can read, listen to podcasts or review their lessons
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 of simply waiting in traffic. A student,
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, could revise vocabulary for an exam during the journey. Some people
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 use the trip to relax and separate home life from work, which helps them start the day more calmly.
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, these benefits depend on finding a seat and a quiet environment, which cannot be guaranteed during rush hour.
Conclusion
In conclusion,
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 a long commute can offer some time for reading or relaxing, I believe the physical tiredness and stress it causes outweigh these advantages. Employers and schools could reduce the problem by offering more flexible hours.

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task response
You answer all parts of the task. You show both views and give your own view in the first and last parts. To make your view stronger, add one more clear reason why the bad side is greater, such as less time for family, sleep, or exercise.
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Your main ideas are clear: long trips can make people tired, while travel time can be used for study or rest. Add a little more detail about stress, health, or home life to make the first view more full.
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Your examples fit your ideas well. The student example is easy to understand. You could also give one work example about a person getting home late and having less time with family.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear shape: first view, second view, then your own final view. Each part has one main idea, so it is easy to follow.
coherence and cohesion
The links between ideas work well, especially “On the one hand”, “On the other hand”, “For example”, and “However”. Try not to use the same link words too often in future writing. You can also use simple links such as “Also”, “As a result”, and “Because of this”.
coherence and cohesion
Some ideas could be joined more smoothly. For example, after saying that people arrive tired, explain more clearly how this leads to lower work or study results. This will make the flow even stronger.
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You give a clear answer to the question and keep your own view the same from the start to the end.
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The examples of a student on public transport and a person using a train for study are relevant and helpful.
coherence and cohesion
The opening and final parts are clear and direct.
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Your paragraphs are well ordered, and the reader can easily see the two different views.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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