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People no longer use newspapers and television because the internet plays the same role as them. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Newspapers
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 and
television
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 have played a key and vital role in the development of our
country
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. During the emergency period in 1978
newspapers
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 were widely circulated across the
country
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 in knowing the
people
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 about their situation. In the early 1980
television
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 emerged as a new form of medium. In early ,1990 the
internet
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 was introduced globally and since
then
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 it has become the fastest way of the medium communicating the news to the
people
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. At present
print
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 and electronic
media
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 are facing very tight competition from many of the
internet
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 platforms available online. To some ,extent I agree that the
internet
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 has replaced
newspapers
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 and
television
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 in some sectors of society. For ,example in a
country
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 like India only 60% of the population live in cities and the remaining 40% left in rural areas. The
people
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 living in the urban areas are very much familiar with online
media
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 when compared to
print
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 and electronic
media
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 and
this
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 is because of the present technology adopted by the service providers.
Further
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, it is well known that all the leading daily
newspapers
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 are available on the
internet
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 platform which has become easier for the customer to view the paper on her mobile no matter where they are.
Secondly
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, in rural areas
people
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 still rely on
print
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media
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 rather than the
internet
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,
this
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 is because in our
country
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 only 35% of the
people
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 use smartphones and the remaining 65% are still using analogue mobile phones which shows the reason behind the existence of the newspaper, a
television
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 in the fast-moving world.
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 public totally rely on
print
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media
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 news rather than an online platform because of factors
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 as tampering with data and other technical-related issues.
Finally
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, most the
people
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 prefer
internet
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 over
newspapers
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 and
television
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 in developed countries across the globe.
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