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Question: in the future, no body will buy printed newspaper or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

#future #body #newspaper #books
Nowadays, with the advancement of technology, online resources are more available. I agree that
people
 tend to read news or
books
 through the internet
instead
 of physical
books
 because there are a lot of advantages of online reading. Many websites allow
people
 to reach
to
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their
content
 for free.
For example
, fiction, documentary, and newspaper.
However
, some online
content
 platforms offer
subscription
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plan
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 for their readers. In order to read exclusive
content
 or premium
content
, they have to pay some money to them while
non subscribers
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 have limitations to read any
content
 on that website.
In addition
, there are many reasons why
people
 prefer to read
books
 via their
smartphone
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 or tablet. The reason is they may not want to produce more paper waste.
Moreover
, some
people
 think that when they read something through their tablet, they have more concentration than reading from real
books
. There are
also
 concerns about copyright
content
in
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 the internet. Because,
in
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 the internet, a lot of
illegle
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illegal
contents
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content
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 are approachable.
People
 may reach
to
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these
contents
 without paying anything. The copyright is the thing that we should be aware of and tends not to support those who post these
contents
 by avoiding
to read
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 them. The thing that we should do is report these
contents
 to make them disappear and unavailable anymore. In conclusion, I totally agree that
people
are
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no longer spend their money
to buy
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newspaper
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 and
books
 in the future. But, It does not mean that they can read everything online without purchasing.
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