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Economic progresses are often used to measure a country’s success. However, some people believe that other factors are more important. What other factors should also be considered when measuring a country’s success? Do you think one factor is more important than others?

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For the
country
, it is necessary to calculate the
economy
 to know the success rate of a particular
country
. For , there are some important
factors
such
 as land, labour and capital used to know the economic progress of the county.
However
, many individuals notice, that there are many other
factors
 which not considered. Because if the
country
’s GDP increased
then
 why still the unemployment ratio is high in the
country
? So, I am going to write about some essential
factors
.
First
 and foremost, education is the main aspect which will support in
country
’s economic growth.
For instance
, if the
country
 has a standard education system and foreign universities availability in the state. In other ,states students will arrive in the
country
. When the doors open, they live for two to five years for being educated themselves, they can start work in that same
country
 it can help in boosting an
economy
.
Secondly
, a high standard health system, if the
country
 has advanced technology in health treatment that will
also
 help in the growth of the
economy
.
Thirdly
, human rights are
also
 playing an important role, when it comes to the economic growth of the
country
. In many ,countries there are a lot of controversies between the government and its people due to the non-availability of proper rights in favour of an individual. So, because of that people were migrating to other countries. If the government considered
this
 an essential factor and implement it according to the will of the people it will boost the
economy
.
Finally
, every factor is very important than other issues. As I mentioned the
country
's
economy
 has stabilized and scaled high,
then
 automatically should be seen zero percentage in unemployment and no individual live below the Poverty line, but not found. So, I think the above
factors
 can be taken into the consideration to check the progress of the
country
’s
economy
.
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