Some people believe that younger family members should be legally responsible for supporting older family members when they become physically, mentally and financially unable to look after themselves. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Humans are destined to age and tend to become generally unable to cater for themselves. It has been argued that younger relatives should be held responsible for the upkeep and
care
of the elderly in their family and that
this
should be enforceable with the backing of the law, others have
however
expressed their contrary beliefs on
this
issue. I strongly agree with the former school of thought. Despite the fact that it is well known that as we age, we become quite reliant on younger
people
for strength, mental health and for finance, young
people
often have little or no time to do
this
hence
the need for making the policy
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law. Who do we rely upon if not our immediate family members who are more vibrant and full of vitality and
this
is known by the government of each country
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Moreover
, it is trite that the warmth of close relations brings succour to aged
people
.
For example
, it has been established that elders who are tended to by their grandchildren or offsprings fiar better than their counterparts who are in old peoples' homes
this
perhaps can be attributed to the strong emotional ties that bind them together.
Therefore
, it has become desirable that young
people
be mandated not to neglect their old relatives as
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is currently the case in Japan. Another thing to bear in mind is the fact that peculiar and remarkable interactions have been made between the persons concerned over time and that memories have been created within the clan that the old and young reminisce upon fondly.
Although
there are trained
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care givers
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nowadays, the joy that comes with family time cannot be jettisoned.
Also
, when I consider the benefit of
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of history and knowledge which benefits individuals and the entire country, through oral tales and
reditions
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renditions
traditions
editions
by the elderly to their younger
generation
, I cannot but agree that the
care
of the old
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left with their younger
generation
with
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legal enforcement.
For instance
,
recipies
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recipes
have been passed down from
generation
to
generation
during interactions between the two sects and traditions have been preserved
this
way. To sum up, I support that the younger
generation
of each family be held liable for the
care
of their
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as
this
benefits not only the old but
also
the young and the entire nation.
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