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With the rise of e-books comes the decline in paper books. Some people see this as a good step forward while others do not. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend.

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Nowadays, few individuals view
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the increase
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 in online
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 and a decrease in offline
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 as a great leap,
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however
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 others have
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a contrary
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opinion
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opinions
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.
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 essay will discuss the merits and the demerits of
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 trend.
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 and flexibility of e-
books
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is
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 one of the great advantages it has over paper
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. A lot of magazines and journals are easy to come by on the internet, where you can read, save and
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 share them
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 others at once, in different locations
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 low cost.
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 year my colleague at work told us about an article,
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and within
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few
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 minutes she shared it with everyone at the same time, which wouldn't have been possible with hard
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books
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.
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,
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the danger
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 of
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ultra-violet
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 light rays associated with
usage
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the usage
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 of
computer
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computers
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 is a major
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. Ultra-violent light rays is a bad ray of light
which
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 damages vision and causes irritation to
eyes
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the eyes
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 when exposed to it over a long time, online
books
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 will make a lot of people use systems and phones exposing them and destroying their lenses leading to
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a frequent
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 visit to see an Ophthalmologist and usage of
eye glasses
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eyeglasses
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 or a contact lens. A typical example happened when I read project works on my tablet or system,
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and I
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develop
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a headache
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headache
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headaches
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 and tearing eyes. To quite a few
individual
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 it is a
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, they would prefer not to read at all. In conclusion, though there is a growth in soft
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 booklet over
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the hard
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copy
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 of
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 accessibility and
cost effectiveness
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 which is a great achievement to some, others do not see it
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 way, because of the discomfort it usually
bring
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. From the benefits and drawbacks discussed in
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essay
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,
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government
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the government
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 should ensure varieties of hard
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books
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 in Public libraries.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Convenience
  • Portability
  • Accessibility
  • Cost-effectiveness
  • Environmental conservation
  • Tactile experience
  • Aesthetic appeal
  • Digital fatigue
  • Prolonged screen time
  • Technical issues
  • Independent bookstores
  • Piracy issues
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