In the present era children are found to have fewer responsibilities than it used to be in the past time. some people consider it as a positive development, however, some people believe it to be negative trend. discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In
modern
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era, responsibilities which used to be associated with
children
are fading away. there are people who are in favour of
this
change.
however
,
according to
others
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others,
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this
trend is believed to be unpleasant. both standpoints are discussed as follows. It is a widely held view that
children
do not easily accept responsibilities as the previous generations' kids did. Some parents admire the aforesaid change and the reason behind
this
thinking is claimed to be that childhood is considered a phase in which kids should enjoy life to the fullest and not having a great amount of responsibility is known as one of
this
period's main features. being concerned about providing sufficient goods for the family, meeting needs and earning enough in order to be praised that
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commonly assumed as positive points are nowadays being treated as parents' failure in the
up bringing
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upbringing
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of
offsprings
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.
Conversely
, some
skepticals
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sceptics
sceptical
suggest that former methods and the
existed
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expectations would have eventually led to
children
's growth and success in each and every aspect
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life. It is thought that future achievements of the past generations are directly related to
this
notion and by giving responsibilities to
children
at a young age, hardship in the path of life can be felt and the entitled manner in
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will be dealt with.
Furthermore
,
children
acknowledge that they will be praised and rewarded if the work is done in an agreeable way,
on the contrary
, punishment awaits them if the devoted task is incomplete or resolved poorly. In conclusion, there is no room for doubt that both opinions simultaneously have advantages and downsides,
however
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it is purely logical that
children
should be allowed to take much less responsibility in comparison to adults in order to develop their sense of imagination and creativity
as well as
gain enough energy to tackle the challenges ahead without frustration.
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