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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Decisions are made based on the options that one is presented. In today's world, some believe that we have been bombarded with a vast range of options. I partly agree with
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 statement as it has made
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 become more indecisive but
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,
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 are able to exercise their preferences. Decision-making has become much harder. Having a wide variety of choices can be overwhelming for a lot of
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, and can result in anxiety and panic attacks. Grocery shopping,
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, takes my friend a longer time than average because she is unable to quickly decide on one item as there are different brands selling the same foodstuffs. She states that it is difficult to pick one as they have similar ingredients so she considers other factors like price, customer reviews and quantity. A limited option eliminates time wasted on indecision.
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, with many options, most
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 are able to do what they really desire without needing to compromise. They are able to make well-suited decisions, explore and find out their likes and dislikes. An acquaintance ,
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, was opportuned to try different cuisines from around the world, and a dish originating from Korea became her favourite. If she did not make a decision to try other continental foods,she would have had no knowledge of Korean meals. Leaving her comfort zone has allowed her to enjoy new experiences. To conclude, in
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 essay I partly agreed with the view that abundant choices have been made available in recent years.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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