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Fewer young people do farming work in rural areas. Why? Should young people be encouraged to do farming work?

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Some
people
 agurment that young
people
 take part in farming
work
 in countryside area.
This
 is essay I talk about reason as well as how encouraged immature
people
 to do farming
work
. On the one hand, there are series of reason why
children
 today rarely
work
 in the fields.
First
 of all, they are afraid of getting dirty, but the fact that working in the field is very hard and tremendous. So it is inevitable that mud and water will splash on
people
 or clothes.
Secondly
, with widespread popularity of advanced technology,
children
 spend most their time with them namely: smartphone, television and so on
instead
 of doing farming
work
 in rural region. In the end, it is due to the laziness of each
people
. Because they simply think that
instead
 of having to
work
 hard in the fields, they should stay at home and play.
On the other hand
, there are a variety of ways to encourage
children
 to farm.
First
 of all, parents play an important role in creating a healthy living environment for their
children
: by encouraging them to do manual labor by working in the fields,
although
 it is hard
work
, it helps them to form good qualities
such
 as perseverance, hard
work
 and so on.
Secondly
, the school needs to have practical activities to help the child experience that
work
.
Finally
, the
children
 need to be aware of what they need to do to help the country as well as the development of agriculture. In conclusion, there are many reasons why
children
 do less farming as well as ways to encourage them to do it, thereby helping the development of agriculture as well as the development of the country.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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