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Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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Some people hold the view that
children
 should be given the freedom to decide on their own, while other people demonstrate that
children
 may become selfish if too many things can be decided on their own. In my opinion,
children
 should be given some level of freedom to make their own decisions, but they should be limited to using their decision rights. It is reasonable for some people to demonstrate that
children
's liberty of making their own decisions should be guaranteed.
Children
 can benefit from making some small decisions on their own.
For example
, if
children
 spend the money they saved on some purchases on their own, they may less likely to waste money in the future, for they know how hard they save their money.
Besides
, if they are encouraged to decide on their own, they can spend more time on interesting things, which may help them feel happier and less stressed.
However
, some negative results could arise when
children
 can decide all things in their daily lives.
Children
 may become severely selfish if they can make all their own choices, for they get everything very easily.
For example
, if
children
 can decide everything in their daily life, they will buy every toy they desire without making an effort. They may become severely selfish after growing up and only follow their own interests, for they get everything easily when they are young. They are not willing to make a sacrifice when they are in a team, or they may argue with their boss when they are required to work overtime, which makes them hard to adapt the society. In conclusion,
children
 can benefit from making their own decision, while the usage of their decision rights should be limited.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Autonomy
  • Consequence-awareness
  • Self-centered
  • Informal decision-making education
  • Child development
  • Age-appropriate choices
  • Cognitive growth
  • Fostering independence
  • Parental guidance
  • Societal norms
  • Interpersonal consideration
  • Balance of freedom
  • Individualism versus collectivism
  • Experience-based learning
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