Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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a vital tool to sell your
products
or
services
in a competitive market. Some people think that advertising is successful in leading us to buy the offered
products
or
services
but some people might think that advertising is getting common these days. To successfully survive and be attractive in a competitive
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advertisement
market, advertisers often have to be creative in advertising. A creative
advertisement
can successfully catch the attention of viewers because there
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wide
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range of similar
products
and
services
in the market these days.
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at a competitive price. With
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you may get to know the
products
or
services
more and if you see the same
advertisement
more often, you will most likely go for the particular advertised
products
or
services
. Meanwhile, there is another point of view on
advertisement
is getting too common. Due to the similarity of
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, viewers will start to get bored,
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of
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freshness and interest while watching the
advertisement
, they may even get annoyed by the repetitive and similar
advertisement
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every 15 minutes. At
this
time, viewers will rather take a break from watching TV or skip the
advertisement
to avoid watching it. In my opinion, advertisements may succeed in convincing us to buy the offered
products
or
services
or
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can
also
be unsuccessful in many other ways.
Advertisments
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Advertisements
can be commonly seen these days on TV or social media so
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must be advertised in an appropriate way to achieve the desired marketing results.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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