Information technology enables many people to do their work outside their workplace (e.g. at home, when travelling, etc.). Do the benefits of this mobility outweigh the disadvantages?

Due to the advancement of technology, many people are able to
work
at other places
instead
of their office, some people think that it is not beneficial while
this
essay believes that its benefits outweigh its drawbacks. On the one hand, there
are
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two
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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of working
at
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other places. The
first
disadvantage is that they are easily distracted. As they are not working at the office, they may be distracted by many
stuffs
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such
as noise from neighbours and their family members. They will not be able to focus on their jobs and
thus
will lower working efficiency . Another disadvantage is that there will be less direct
communications
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with colleagues. When they are doing projects together, they cannot discuss directly so there may be some misunderstandings and the quality may decrease.
On the other hand
, the advantages are twofold.
Firstly
, it can save time and travelling
cost
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. When staff
work
at home, they do not have to travel to
work
so they can save time
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work
, which may
increase
their working amount. They can
also
reduce travelling
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so it can passively
increase
their income.
Moreover
, it can
increase
flexibility. As they can choose to
work
at
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anywhere and anytime.
For instance
, they can still finish their report even when they are on holiday or at home,
this
can
increase
their productivity. They can
also
choose the working time which suits them, so
this
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work life
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balance but
also
productivity.
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