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Information technology enables many people to do their work outside their workplace (e.g. at home, when travelling, etc.). Do the benefits of this mobility outweigh the disadvantages?

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Due to the advancement of technology, many people are able to
work
 at other places
instead
 of their office, some people think that it is not beneficial while
this
 essay believes that its benefits outweigh its drawbacks. On the one hand, there
are
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 two
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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 of working
at
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in
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 other places. The
first
 disadvantage is that they are easily distracted. As they are not working at the office, they may be distracted by many
stuffs
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kinds of stuff
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such
 as noise from neighbours and their family members. They will not be able to focus on their jobs and
thus
 will lower working efficiency . Another disadvantage is that there will be less direct
communications
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 with colleagues. When they are doing projects together, they cannot discuss directly so there may be some misunderstandings and the quality may decrease.
On the other hand
, the advantages are twofold.
Firstly
, it can save time and travelling
cost
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. When staff
work
 at home, they do not have to travel to
work
 so they can save time
to
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work
, which may
increase
 their working amount. They can
also
 reduce travelling
cost
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 so it can passively
increase
 their income.
Moreover
, it can
increase
 flexibility. As they can choose to
work
at
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anywhere and anytime.
For instance
, they can still finish their report even when they are on holiday or at home,
this
 can
increase
 their productivity. They can
also
 choose the working time which suits them, so
this
 can not only enhance
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work life
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 balance but
also
 productivity.
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