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Individual can do nothing to improve the environment;only goverment and large companies can make a difference.To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Introduction
It is mostly argued that only the
government
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 and big
companies
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 can improve the environment as opposed to
people
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. I completely agree
with
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with the idea because the
government
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 and large
companies
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 have adequate resources and
also
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 have appealing ways of mobilizing
people
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.
Body paragraph 1
Firstly
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, the
government
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 and big
companies
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 have adequate resources to finance environmental
activities
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.
Moreover
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, maintaining a healthy and conducive environment requires huge capital which is readily available from the public sector.
For instance
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, tree seedlings required for planting to create a forest are very expensive.
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, the
government
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 and other big organizations are in a better position to conserve the
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environment
environmnt
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environment
.
Body paragraph 2
Secondly
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, they have appealing ways of mobilising
people
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 to be part
environmental
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of environmental
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 conservation.
This
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 is because they are more popular
hence
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 they attract more
people
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 to participate in environmental
activities
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.
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,
people
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 feel patriotic to their country when they involve themselves in
activities
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 conducted by the
government
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.
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, a
government
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 may give out a public holiday to conduct
such
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activities
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hence
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 many
people
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 feel happy.
Conclusion
In conclusion, I strongly agree that only
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government
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the government
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 and large
companies
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that
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apply
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can make a difference in bringing change to the environment since it has adequate funds and has more appealing ways
to
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for
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 the public to participate in those
activities
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.

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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