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In the modern world it is possible to shop, work and communicate with people via Internet and leave without any face to face on that with others. Is it a positive or negative development?

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In the newly developed
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 it is super feasible to shop, work and communicate with
populance
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populace
 through the
usage
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 of
internet
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 and many of a person could be lives without any face to face connection with other ones.
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 essay would delve into the positive outcome than the negative.
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 and foremost, in
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 modern generation,
growth
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the growth
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 of technologies is increasing day by day. A faction of
people
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 could shop through online media
such
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a
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as
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flipkart
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Flipkart
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 amazon
instagram
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.
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 is
such
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 an easy way
for
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 purchase things and
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 get additional offers, gifts and so on.
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 work from
home
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 online classes are
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another instance of
modern
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the modern
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 world it would help lots of
people
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especially
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 pandemic.
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, covid
19 period
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 digital media plays
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 role among
public
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the public
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.
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, it is possible to maintain
the
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long distance
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 relationship.
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, the
people
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 who
having
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a disability
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disability
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 the online platforms are very useful
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helpful.
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 could save time for the
people
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 in
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 competitive world.
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,
although
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the
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social interaction is declining
by
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 the
usage
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 of
internet
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 and the
people
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 are getting into
the
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apply
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introvert
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behavior
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behaviour
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,
but
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apply
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the development of
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internet
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the internet
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 is
such
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 an amazing gift for the busy competitive
populance
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populace
 is a fact which should not be overlooked. In short,
the
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apply
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people
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 fall into
isolated
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an isolated
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 world, but the infinite
usage
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 of digital media is one of the
blessing
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 in
this
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 modern busy life. Ergo, I strongly
believes
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believe
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 that purchasing, working and communicating
by
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through
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 the
usage
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 of
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internet
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the internet
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 is a feasible method as well as it is a positive development.
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