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Although the position of women in society today has improved, there is still a great deal of sexual discrimination. Do you agree?

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There has been a controversy about whether
women
 are still being discriminated against due to their female identities. I think
this
 situation is difficult in today's society, and my reasons will be explained in the following paragraphs.
First
,
women
 have fewer job opportunities. It's commonplaced that many companies tend to hire more male employees rather than
females
. The reason is simple; they believe
men
 have a higher-price performance.
For
example
, on account of different body structures,
females
 have some issues that males don't have,
such
 as period, and companies need to pay them when they are pregnant. At
this
 point, males seem to be more valuable and less "expensive";
therefore
,
females
 are less popular, compared with males, in the job market.
Second
, the growth of sexual harassment in the workplace is a stark
example
. According to some statistical figures, a large number of
women
 have been harassed at least once.
Such
 a phenomenon brings difficulty to
women
 nowadays; it lets them feel being a woman is disadvantageous. It's worth mentioning that the rape rate around the globe is increasing, which can reflect the fact of sexual discrimination against
women
 to a large extent.
For
example
, between 30 and 40 million
women
 in India have been raped at least once. In
this
 case,
this
 eye-catching number reflects the tough situation
of
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females
 worldwide.
Third
,
women
 have a lower income compared with
men
. Take the US as an
example
. It has been reported that the wages of
women
 in the US were around 20% lower than
men
's in 2018.
Besides
, it isn't an individual
example
; some figures show
this
 is a global trend that
women
 have a lower income than
men
 in all sorts of jobs; even in some female-dominant occupations, like the nurse. In conclusion,
women
 are still in a plight.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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