At school, children should either be taught to compete or to cooperate. In your opinion, which form of education would best benefit society as a whole? Describe both sides of the argument and explain your own opinion

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at school. One of those things
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people debate over is
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children
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. Should it be a
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form or a
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This
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First
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side,
this
manner of teaching is based on working together.
For example
, making homework together or writing a report together or doing a presentation together.
This
way
of education makes sure that
children
will learn to work together,
this
is important because in a company/university it is acquired to work in a group.
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I will discuss the
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way
,
this
education type is based on competing against
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against
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a prize for the highest grade. It depends on the child, but for some
children
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this
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element will make them work harder because they want to win really badly.
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it will give them some experience on how to deal with stress. To conclude, in my point of view you need both types of
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education system.
However
, I believe that the
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is more important to benefit
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society as a whole.
This
is because the world is one big competition in my opinion and it will help the
children
to prepare for the big world.
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