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Some people think that climate change could have a negative effect on business. Other people think that climate change could create more business opportunities. Discuss both views give your own opinion.

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Recently the Global Warming issue has been one of the most discussed topics and divided people into two groups based on their opinion about the damage done to the
business
 by worldwide problems. Some individuals believe that global problems have a harmful impact on
business
 and economics in general,
while
 others think that they provide new opportunities for companies' development. On the one hand, negative effects on the agriculture sector from atmosphere fluctuation can be observed nowadays. Heavy rain or no rain for any specific crop
caused
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 a bad effect on farming which results in a farmer being poorer.
In addition
 to
this
, it
also
 affects the nation where the demand is high for
the
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food and the supply becomes low because of damage.
For example
, shortage of seafood in food malls.
As a consequence
, switching of weather affects
business
 majorly.
On the other hand
,
such
sector
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 as tourism has beneficial consequences for global warming.
Due to
 the fast climate change and melting glaciers in cold parts of the planet, people try to catch their
last
 opportunities to visit cold countries
hence
it develops
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business
.
For example
, travelling to Antarctica seemed to be an unaffordable vacation for the majority;
however
, its popularity
had
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has
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significant growth in the
last
 years with the help of people who are ready to give their
last
 money to see ice blocks. In conclusion, I believe that global issues have
more
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cause
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a
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big
loss
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losses
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 to companies than bring positive
effect
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effects
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 to their
evolvement
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evolution
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, except for some specific sectors.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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