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In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message ?

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Having plenty of experience and achievement for youths has become popular since globalisation comes. Many assume that in the industrialisation era, teenagers can acquire the targets of life with hard work.
This
 phenomenon is becoming an issue with some benefits and drawbacks for
children
 and
this
 essay will address
this
 current trend.
To begin
 with, in
this
 recent year, juveniles frequently will be
hard-working
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person
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 to achieve their
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future’
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 goals.
Children
 tend to have several targets in their life and have a mindset to
force
 themselves in order to gain the best result.
For example
, students in school tend to study hard to compete with their classmates and
also
 want to be the
first
 rank in class. Learners will
force
 themselves to learn about the subjects and to succeed in the final examination. If the score is better than others, they will be glad because their effort is fruitful. With
this
 experience, young individuals seem to
force
 themselves to achieve their goals with
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hard-work
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.
Furthermore
,
in contrast
, the context of hard-working students could have an impact on
children’
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 health. Young people who are forced to work hard, frequently focus on the targets
instead
 of
aware
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 of their health.
For instance
, middle-aged athletes have numerous training sessions in a month because of competition.
Therefore
, young athletes rehearse and
force
 themselves to have hard training. With
this
 hectic schedule, some
children
 will have burnout issues. Even though
,
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in
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some
day
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, they feel exhausted or gett injured, they still train with a heavy time. All in all, the concept of hard-working in
this
 recent
year
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 has become a famous issue, especially for
children
 who have been affected.
This
 concept will be
a
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merit because students tend to be hard-working
person
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, and
also
 be disadvantageous owing to forcing themselves and ignoring health problems. Parents should control the
children
’s activities and have sufficient time to take care of them.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • achieve
  • try hard
  • positive mindset
  • self-belief
  • motivates
  • ambitious goals
  • resilience
  • determination
  • confidence
  • self-esteem
  • growth mindset
  • unrealistic expectations
  • disappointment
  • failure
  • effort
  • hard work
  • seek support
  • individual differences
  • abilities
  • capabilities
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