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Many working people get little or no excercise either during tge workinf days or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. Why do many working people not to get enough excerise? What can be done about this problem.

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 contemporary world, many employees do not practice enough workout during the weekdays
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 the weekends and
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, get sick. There are many factors that might prevent these
people
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 from exercising and there are few possible solutions to solve
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 problem.
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 from doing
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the workout
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workout
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 is the extended
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during
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weekdays
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week days
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weekdays
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. In fact, most
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people
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 spend extra
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 to cope with the expenses that life demands nowadays.
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 enforce them to leave their
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 at a late hour and spend their weekends resting because of fatigue.
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, the frequent overtime
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 that might extend up to 3
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 per day as well as sudden meetings that need to be attended.
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,
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 would end up with long
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 at
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 with a tired body and a bad mood to look after their
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 and go
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exercising. Arguably, one possible solution is to implement a
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 system
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workplace
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the workplace
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 in both government and private sectors and do monthly checkout.
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 will guide the employees to care about their
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 by doing exercise and eating a healthy diet.
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, Google head office in the US provides a fitness room in the workplace and allow its usage at any time during working
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 as well as a free monthly checking for sugar and cholesterol level.
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, better access to the gym and perhaps workers will be more concerned about their
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. To conclude, it has been noticed that
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 problems affect mainly working individuals because they do not practice exercise regularly. One of the reasons, is they try to reach their demand and make ends meet and one possible solution is the providing of a fitness program in the workplace to help the staff maintain their
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