some people think that all teengares should be required to do unpaid work in their free time to help the local community. they believe this would benefit both the individual tenager and society as a whole. do you agree or disagree?
There are several
people
who advocate the idea that young Use synonyms
people
should voluntarily contribute to their Use synonyms
community
and Use synonyms
this
contribution would be helpful both for themselves and their Linking Words
community
. I agree that Use synonyms
this
upbringing of Linking Words
teenagers
Use synonyms
produce
a number of benefits. Change the verb form
produces
Firstly
, unpaid volunteering help to build sincerity in Linking Words
teenagers
. They learn how to help Use synonyms
others
without anticipating Use synonyms
reward
from Fix the agreement mistake
rewards
others
. As many Use synonyms
people
do some Use synonyms
favor
to Change the spelling
favour
others
by expecting value in return, Use synonyms
otherwise
, they might not Linking Words
to
do anything good to Change the verb form
apply
others
, even they might not Use synonyms
to
show even a sympathy toward Fix the infinitive
apply
who
are in need. Correct pronoun usage
those who
Secondly
, rendering adolescents unpaid Linking Words
community
services help them form solidarity with other members of Use synonyms
locality
. Residents of an area would form a sincere bond with young citizens once they become aware of their free contributions as well as Add an article
the locality
this
lead to the increase of their fame among the members of the society. Linking Words
For example
, in some regions of Linking Words
Turkey
there are a number of close-knit communities which Add a comma
,Turkey
teenagers
helped to build thanks to their constant voluntary services. Use synonyms
On the other hand
, Linking Words
voluntary
work of Correct article usage
the voluntary
teenagers
may deter the rise of Use synonyms
crime
rate in Correct article usage
the crime
neighborhoods
. Sometimes installed cameras are deliberately cut off to commit burglary. Change the spelling
neighbourhoods
However
, if young Linking Words
people
who usually spend their time on Use synonyms
streets
playing with their friends become Correct article usage
the streets
vigil
, they may halt crimes to be committed. Replace the word
vigilant
This
eventually Linking Words
bring
about peace in Change the verb form
brings
the
society. Correct article usage
apply
Furthermore
, volunteering Linking Words
help
to develop the character of hardworking Correct subject-verb agreement
helps
in
Change preposition
apply
teenagers
. Many parents complain that their teenage children are lazy. In order to cure laziness they should be directed to unpaid Use synonyms
community
services, while helping the elderly or disabled they may gradually become industrious. As the matter of fact, as for Use synonyms
statistics
many criminals were lazy Add a comma
,statistics
people
. In conclusion, I am on the side Use synonyms
with
those who think young Change preposition
of
people
should do volunteering Use synonyms
to
their local society which would be beneficial to youngsters themselves as well as their Change preposition
for
community
.Use synonyms
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.
A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).
Stick to this essay structure:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion