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The Internet has dramatically altered our lives over the past few decades. Although some of these changes have been negative, the overall effect of this technology has been positive.What are your opinions on this?

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Nowadays every piece of information is just a click away from us, the horizon to obtain knowledge has been expanded, and the credit for
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. The
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 has influenced our lives to a huge extent but like ,everything it comes with some drawbacks and has altered the human race both in negative and positive aspects. I advocate that there is a positive net effect of technologies. Many have a concern, that
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 has taken away the peace of adults especially parents are concerned about their children as the
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 has exposed adult stuff to young minds at a very tender age,
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 people are less concerned about things around them and spent a plethora of time with technologies resulting in poor mental development.
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 has resulted in feelings of isolation amongst the youth and affected society in ample ways.
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, there are many teens living in the virtual
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, having many friends on social media but in ,
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reality they have no one to talk
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 resulting in depression.
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 has become the new normal
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 causing poor emotional development amongst the population.
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, technology has helped mankind to have an access to infinite knowledge even those that are difficult to obtain and has connected the
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 better.
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, a student living in a rural area preparing for medical may not have all the required materials in his library or market but due to the availability of the
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 wide web can even attend lectures from some of the best teachers in the
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,
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 easing his journey in the medical field and there are so many
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 instances.
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, the
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 is of significant value and has an optimistic effect on society. To conclude,
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 the
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 has negative effects on human beings,
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, the positivity brought by the
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 is far beyond the demerits.
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