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The Internet has dramatically altered our lives over the past few decades. Although some of these changes have been negative, the overall effect of this technology has been positive.What are your opinions on this?

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Nowadays every piece of information is just a click away from us, the horizon to obtain knowledge has been expanded, and the credit for
this
 goes to the
internet
. The
Internet
 has influenced our lives to a huge extent but like ,everything it comes with some drawbacks and has altered the human race both in negative and positive aspects. I advocate that there is a positive net effect of technologies. Many have a concern, that
internet
 has taken away the peace of adults especially parents are concerned about their children as the
internet
 has exposed adult stuff to young minds at a very tender age,
moreover
 people are less concerned about things around them and spent a plethora of time with technologies resulting in poor mental development.
This
 has resulted in feelings of isolation amongst the youth and affected society in ample ways.
For instance
, there are many teens living in the virtual
world
, having many friends on social media but in ,
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reality they have no one to talk
hence
 resulting in depression.
This
 has become the new normal
subsequently
 causing poor emotional development amongst the population.
On the other hand
, technology has helped mankind to have an access to infinite knowledge even those that are difficult to obtain and has connected the
world
 better.
For example
, a student living in a rural area preparing for medical may not have all the required materials in his library or market but due to the availability of the
world
 wide web can even attend lectures from some of the best teachers in the
world
,
thereafter
 easing his journey in the medical field and there are so many
such
 instances.
Therefore
, the
internet
 is of significant value and has an optimistic effect on society. To conclude,
although
 the
internet
 has negative effects on human beings,
however
, the positivity brought by the
internet
 is far beyond the demerits.
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