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Nowadays, many people have to work longer hours and they feel more stress out then before, what are the reasons and what can employer do to make their life easier.

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These days people's life is full of stress. It is plain to see, that many people have to work longer
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 which leads to a great deal of stress. In the forthcoming paragraphs,
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 heavy workload results in
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 unfinished tasks. On top of that, You can’t concentrate on one job on the grounds that, there are
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 of work that should be done.
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, working for long
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 contribute to, an unhealthy body. It has an ill effect mentally and physically.
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 to what I have just said, you may not feel comfortable in your job situation.
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, in long term it will make you old.
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, some companies do not provide, appropriate, equipment and resources which puts employees under pressure.
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 employees are having many stresses these days, companies can do different things related to
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 problem.
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 of all, nowadays humans place a premium on having a healthier lifestyle. A gym membership can be provided to workers. They
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 can be provided with yoga classes each month. On top of that, they can reduce working
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 and balance workload.
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, it was written in a magazine that the rest should be given to them each 2
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. They have to promote healthy living habits on the job,
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 as free healthy snacks
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 of junk food.
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 will motivate employees to maintain healthy habits in the industry. To conclude, all in all, there are several things that can be done related to
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. Gone is the idea that labour forces don’t need to rest.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • workaholic
  • burnout
  • work-life balance
  • workplace stress
  • workplace flexibility
  • workload
  • responsibilities
  • globalization
  • competition
  • advancements
  • technology
  • support
  • resources
  • financial pressures
  • flexible work arrangements
  • stress management
  • wellness programs
  • skill development
  • advancement
  • positive work environment
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