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Nowadays, food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improved the way people live? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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No one can deny that nowadays it is easier to get some food and focus on other
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. But even a few hundred years ago it was a world of difference, compared to what we have now. In my opinion,
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 change is really significant for a number of reasons, and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
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 of all, today is way easier to bring some food to your apartments or to the place where you live. You don't need to go hunting, waiting for prey for long hours, enough is to visit a grocery shop and buy something there.
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, the process of getting a meal becomes much safer,
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 to the prehistoric ages, when there was a probability to die fighting against a bear or a mammoth.
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, researchers tell that more than twenty
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 of men died early due to severe hunting conditions. It was indeed dangerous and nowadays we are lucky enough not to have these problems.
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, with the help of all modern technologies, like dark kitchen and delivery, people receive more time to spend
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, you can work more in order to reach career goals faster and,
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, increase your level of living.
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 definitely a great reason why our generation usually gets the desired
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 faster than it was possible before. As an example I want to provide, my friend Mark only turned 30, but he is already on the list of the most quickly-growing young entrepreneurs by local Forbes magazine. And he says that he even don't know how to cook, just orders everything from the restaurant nearby and
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 has more time to focus on the
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 he likes. It is certainly clear to see why having the ability not to think about
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 basic
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 as food can really help to achieve more in life. To sum up, I want to emphasize, that today we have
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 a pleasure not to care a lot about the process of getting a meal, and in the light of the above-mentioned reasons, I truly believe that we can make our life even better with
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 enhancement.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • efficiency
  • pre-packaged meals
  • fast-paced
  • food technology
  • cooking appliances
  • healthy eating habits
  • traditional cooking skills
  • processed foods
  • preservatives
  • additives
  • culinary experimentation
  • meal kits
  • online recipe platforms
  • sophisticated dishes
  • smart kitchens
  • nutrition
  • balanced diet
  • food waste
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