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Some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you think lawa are need to make people recycle more of their waste.

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people
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 not enough residential
waste
 recycled.
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 argue that recycling can only increase if
government
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the government
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 regulates some
law
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laws
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. In my opinion, I do not agree that regulations
is
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 needed in order to raise
recycled
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the recycled
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waste
 rate. For one thing, low participation in cycling may mainly
the
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 result of its
inconvenient
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. Another thing is the
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awareness
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stress
 that
people
 have
to
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 the environment. It is in convenient for many
people
 to recycle their household
waste
 at home.
People
 do not actively participate in
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recycling because they do not have access to
high quality
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 recycled
waste
system
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. Some said that they have
travel
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 long distances to find a recycling
center
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 in their province, which discourages them
to
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 being
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active
activer
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active
recycler
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recyclers
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.
Therefore
, the government should provide facilities to make it more accessible
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throughout
troughout
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throughout
 the province without having to regulate
laws
. In
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addition
addion
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addition
, in many
country
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, raising awareness
from
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 campaigns can be effective as
legal
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a legal
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restriction
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restrictions
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. It is true that
laws
 can force
every one
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 to be more aware of their
waste
.
However
, it can be done by launching some campaigns as well.
For example
,
government
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the government
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 can use
the
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social media as a platform to show the impact and alert some
waste
crisis
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crises
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 of unrecycled
waste
.
People
 may tend to have more awareness
on
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this
 issue and try to solve it by recycling their
waste
. In conclusion, I believe that it is not essential to use the
laws
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recycling
reclycing
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 rate since recycling is unpopular because of
its
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is
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convenient
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. So,
awareness
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an awareness
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campaign
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campaigns
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 can have the same outcome
with
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 using the
laws
.
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