It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?

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both sides of
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lives
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. Those sides are their works and personal lives. Taking
risks
has benefits for
people
like getting higher job positions and improving skills but it has some drawbacks which will be discussed in
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First
, working in higher positions involves higher
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pressure
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and accepting higher
risks
.
As a result
, if
people
want to have higher occupations and so higher
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, they should take
risks
.
For example
, a manager has
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salary rather than a normal employee.
Moreover
, when
people
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risk
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, they provide circumstances which push them to improve their
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. in
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,
people
improve themselves, when they create a new situation and accept its
risks
.
For instance
,
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man who has
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experiences
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as
leader
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, but
he
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accepts to be a leader; In
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his leadership skill will be improved.
On the other hand
, taking
risks
has some drawbacks like getting
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failure
and losing family. The
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obvious
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obvious
disadvantage of taking
risks
is getting failed.
Consequently
,
people
, who make a
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decision, might get
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failed
more than others. Another point is that taking
risks
in personal lives increases the
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probability
of losing family members.
For example
,
parents
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who do not save
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of money for
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situation
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, their kids may get sick and die because parents do not have enough money. In conclusion, taking
risks
have some benefits and drawbacks, but I think the advantages of it outweigh the disadvantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Opportunities
  • Growth
  • Innovation
  • Challenges
  • Self-discovery
  • Resilience
  • Uncertainty
  • Consequences
  • Calculated risks
  • Stagnation
  • Regret
  • Comfort zone
  • Entrepreneurship
  • Adventurous spirit
  • Thriving
  • Failure
  • Mitigate
  • Reap the rewards
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