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Nowadays some parents pressure their children to be successful in a specific field. What are the the reasons for this? Is this a positive or negative development?

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School
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 curriculum teaches
children
 many subjects to prepare them for the future. Some
parents
 think that some
fields
 are more important than
others
;
therefore
, they force their
children
 to be good at them. In
this
 essay, I will discuss the reasons behind that action and argue why it is a bad decision to do.
To begin
 with, there are some
fields
 that are seen to be
more
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superior
than
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others
. Many believe that some subjects are harder than
others
,
hence
 for a child to be
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successful
succesful
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successful
 at it will be seen to be smarter than
others
.
Furthermore
, they usually
leads
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 to
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prestigious
prestigous
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prestigious
 professions with high salary, which is one of the parameters of success for some people these days. Despite those reasons, pressuring
children
 cannot be seen as a good action.
Parents
 must realize that each child
born
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 with different talents and different interests.
Therefore
, rather than
dicatating
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dictating
 them to be successful in something they're not talented or interested in,
parents
 should support them in things they like. Einstein, Mozart, and George Washington were successful people each
come
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coming
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 from different
fields
. The path to
become
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a
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successful
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 is not specific to a certain field. In conclusion, some
parents
 force their
children
 to be good at certain
fields
 due to social
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perception
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preception
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perception
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on
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of
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 certain subjects and professions. Despite
the
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these
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 reasons, I believe it would be wrong for
parents
 to force their
children
 to master something they do not like and it would be better for
parents
 to understand and support their
children
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children's
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 talents and interests.
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