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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages??

#experts #children #language #school #outweigh
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Nowadays, education is more developed than old days in the past. In the education curriculum, foreign
language
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 is the additional subject that should be learnt by
children
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 in primary
school
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 until university.
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the advantages of learning a foreign
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 for
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 primary
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 rather than
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in secondary
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school
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The primary
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school
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 is the best time to
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 a foreign
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 the
children
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 have high curiosity so they can
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learn more about a new
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, if they are curious about something new, they always to trying it and
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 they become a fast learner. Another benefit of learning a foreign
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is increasing their cognitive, memories, concentration, and critical thinking.
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, the
children
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 that have been learning a foreign
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 at primary
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 are more adaptable, able to communicate, and able to
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 the task when the teacher explaining explains about the foreign
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 their assignment. . [
this
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, the
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 that starting their learning a foreign
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 at secondary
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 is has
advantage
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 too because when the
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 are learning a foreign
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 their cognitive too but not better rather than the
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 that
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 at primary
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. The drawback of learning a foreign
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 at primary
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 is too earlier early for
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 to
learning
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 a foreign
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 which is more difficult than their
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. In conclusion, I believe that
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are better
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 but the learning method must be fun and interactive both in their
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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