Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages??

Nowadays, education is more developed than old days in the past. In the education curriculum, foreign
language
is the additional subject that should be learnt by
children
in primary
school
until university.
This
essay will discuss
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the advantages of learning a foreign
language
for
children
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primary
school
rather than
secondary
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in secondary
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school
.
The primary
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school
is the best time to
learning
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a foreign
language
for
children
.
This
is because
,
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the
children
at primary
school
have high curiosity so they can
more
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learn more about a new
language
.
Consequently
, if they are curious about something new, they always to trying it and
solveing
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solving
solve
their problem
thus
they become a fast learner. Another benefit of learning a foreign
language
at primary
school
for
children
are
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is increasing their cognitive, memories, concentration, and critical thinking.
For example
, the
children
that have been learning a foreign
language
at primary
school
are more adaptable, able to communicate, and able to
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the task when the teacher explaining explains about the foreign
language
or
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Furthermore
, the
children
that starting their learning a foreign
language
at secondary
school
is has
advantage
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too because when the
children
are learning a foreign
language
it can
increaseing
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increase
increasing
their cognitive too but not better rather than the
children
that
starting
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their learning a foreign
language
at primary
school
. The drawback of learning a foreign
language
at primary
school
is too earlier early for
children
to
learning
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a foreign
language
which is more difficult than their
language
. In conclusion, I believe that
children
is
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are better
learning
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at learning
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a foreign
language
from primary
school
but the learning method must be fun and interactive both in their
school
or home,
thus
their more acceptable to learning a foreign
language
.
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  • pronunciation
  • self-conscious
  • cultural awareness
  • global society
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  • competitive job market
  • foundational skills
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