Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It is often argued that the parent should be responsible for educating their children to become a good
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education providers are the best place to educate
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both view and state my own opinion by considering
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behaviour and
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interpersonal
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the
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kids learn things from their
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did not listen to their
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when a
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shopping with their
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asking to buy groceries or toys
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place. So
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to avoid
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situation
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like that
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should learn how to behave. They need to know their limits.so it
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that the parent is
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key role
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child
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. Institutions are
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place to check their interpersonal
skills
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as leadership, courage ,positive thinking etc. It is good to improve these qualities since their childhood.
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, when they become adults, they use these
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the
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people think that
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good
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while others believe that the best institution is
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for that.
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role in children as
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first
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.As well as education providers help them to improve their qualities
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is
parents
and education providers equally responsible.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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