In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country, while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn. Discuss both views and give your opinion. (Reported 2017, 2019, 2020, 2022 Academic Test)

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Many people argue that there should be a limitation in the maximum wage

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high earners; others,

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, believe that it should be a freedom for people to get the appropriate salary for their dedication. I agree with the second opinion. On the one hand, the idea of controlling salaries is attractive for several reasons. The first reason is

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society

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inequity that comes from the gap between upper and

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income.

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can lead to

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problems

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as discrimination, unfairness and inequality in treatment. What’s more, the limitation in the average salary will contribute

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reducing crime rates,

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more safety for the public.

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some studies, researchers have

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that offenders are formed by the demand of equality that they do not have, so that,

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, not having

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earners can tackle

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issue.

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, I believe that society would suffer a brain drain if maximum wage legislation

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adopted.

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action has a hand in pushing away top workers, if the salary does not meet the demands of these people, they will leave and work in a foreign company.

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will cause a financial

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to the business, leading to the loss of a thousand dollars.

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, the loss of intellectual property is

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harmful to the country.

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shortage of breakthroughs or development as high quality labour force

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to other regions. In conclusion,

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there are some benefits

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setting a limit on the wages of the highest earners, I still believe that it is more disadvantages to

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economy.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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283 words

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