It is important for people to take risks, both in their personal lives and professional lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risk outweigh the disadvantages

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taking
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will be
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some drawbacks.
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, professional people tend to get
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job opportunity to achieve
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salary scale.
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that they did not hesitate to apply for that even
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needed to learn new skills.
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as
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engineer
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responsibility to do in his currier. When he is applying for
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manager position,he needs to know how to manage certain things
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to do it successfully. Sometimes he needs to
gain
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goal.
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individuals
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the individuals
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have experience failures by taking
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like migrate to overseas. Most
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people
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the people
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tend to apply
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visa from overseas
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to get qualified for permanent residence. So sometimes they even get loans to pay their
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tuition
fees. Sometimes they won't be able to recover it,even
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consider that they will be able to
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when they migrate
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overseas. So it will
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to regret their own decision that they put in
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tough conditions like
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individuals need to get certain risks
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to
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lifestyle
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their personal and professional life. It will
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them to
gain
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some drawbacks.
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