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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Living in a nation where you need to speak
its
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 mother tongue can have terrible impacts on society as well as your practical life. I totally agree with
this
 statement for some reasons. ​
Firstly
, living in a country where you need to
use
its
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your
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 mother tongue can make your society bad because you are not familiar with
this
language
 so
that
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it is difficult to communicate with people. Even though you speak in a normal tone but the words you
use
 are not standard for them, they will assume that you are insulting to them.
Moreover
, you do not know all the words which are associated with their culture as well as their traditional events.
Subsequently
, your friends who are
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citizens of
this
 country go to their traditional events when you cannot go with them together because you cannot speak like a native speaker. ​
Secondly
, you can face
with
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the
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problems in practical life if you live in a nation where you have to talk a foreign
language
. The environment where you are living is full of foreigners.
Therefore
, you need to keep in touch with these foreigners not only at work but
also
 at home. Living with
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foreigners is one of the most difficult ones as you need to
use
 their
language
. After that, you are not the priority to the company where you work because most
of
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the
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foreign countries think you cannot
use
 their
language
 professionally. ​In conclusion,
Living
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 in a nation where you need to speak
their
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your
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 mother tongue can have terrible impacts on society as well as practical life.
Therefore
, I definitely agree with
this
 statement for the reasons that I mentioned above.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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