Traditional food is being replaced by international fast food. This has negative effects on family and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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This

is a fact that in many countries, traditional dishes are being replaced with international fast

foods

For instance

, in the country where I live, I have seen the rise of fast-

food

restaurants in my life span. Many

health

experts are concerned about the negative effects of junk

food

on citizens'

health

and some authorities have made policies to limit fast

food

consumption in the community. In

this

essay, I will discuss if traditional fast

food

is really a big threat to society or not and if it is, to what extent we should be concerned. On the one hand, some people say that traditional

food

is on its way to extinction. As fast

food

is pleasant and favourable for young generation's taste, they will soon forget their country's classic

foods

and that will be a pity since traditional

foods

favourablehier,

besides

they are a part of their local culture that has to be protected.

on the other hand

, others believe, in spite of

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of fast

food

's role in people's lives, local dishes can not be eliminated easily. Humans get used to their mother's

food

flavour since their childhood and can not forget it. To give an example, traditional Indian

food

restaurants have been developed in European countries and are still popular among the Indian minority in Europe. I agree with

this

view that fast

foods

are generally, but not always, more unhealthy in comparison to traditional

foods

since they contain more fat and sugar.

Moreover

, they change native cultures' lifestyles, but I believe that fast

foods

were born because of a necessity. Modern life is busy and

fast

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food

industry started as a response to the demand of modern life. They are prepared rapidly and they are

also

delicious so they can not be eliminated but

health

authorities must take actions to limit their

harms

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for example

, by limiting their oil and sugar. In conclusion, I have no doubt that traditional

foods

will always have their own lovers. Fast

foods

will continue to develop and some ways will be found to decrease their disadvantages. Considering these facts, I think we should not exaggerate the negative role of fast

foods

but we must not neglect their

harms

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our

health

and culture.

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