The charts shows numbers of UK tourists visiting two countries from 2010 to 2013.
The bar graph illustrates the number of
travellers
visiting either Thailand
or Greece
over four year
period
.
Overall
, both countries saw drops and increases in tourism over time. Although
Thailand
saw an initial downturn, visiting travellers
rose period
on period
thereafter
. Greece
saw a big fluctuation in the numbers
of people arriving in their country throughout the Fix the agreement mistake
number
period
.
The total figure
of travellers
of UK tourists visiting Thailand
in 2010 stood at 3.5 million, considerably higher than Greece
at that time. However
, in the following period
, this
statistic dropped by around 500000 people, which was lower than Greece
's figure
that same year
. From here on, the numbers gradually rose by 500000 holiday
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holidays
year
, resulting in a final total of 400000 people visiting Thailand
in 2013. This
was also
the highest amount of yearly holiday in the four-yearyear
span.
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four-year year
four-year-year
Greece
's total sum of visits made to the country fluctuated largely through the four years. Beginning in 2010, the total amount of visits by UK travellers
stood at 2.5 million. This
rocketed to slightly under 4.5 thousand visits in 2011. Then
in the following year
, this
figure
dropped massively, to around 1.800thousand. ,Finally
by 2013, the total amount of UK tourists visiting Add a comma
,Finally
Greece
increased to 300 thousand visitors, a million below the total figure
of tourists to Thailand
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