The charts shows numbers of UK tourists visiting two countries from 2010 to 2013.

The charts shows numbers of UK tourists visiting two countries from 2010 to 2013.
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The bar graph illustrates the number of
travellers
visiting either
Thailand
or
Greece
over four
year
period
.
Overall
, both countries saw drops and increases in tourism over time.
Although
Thailand
saw an initial downturn, visiting
travellers
rose
period
on
period
thereafter
.
Greece
saw a big fluctuation in the
numbers
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number
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of people arriving in their country throughout the
period
. The total
figure
of
travellers
of UK tourists visiting
Thailand
in 2010 stood at 3.5 million, considerably higher than
Greece
at that time.
However
, in the following
period
,
this
statistic dropped by around 500000 people, which was lower than
Greece
's
figure
that same
year
. From here on, the numbers gradually rose by 500000
holiday
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per
year
, resulting in a final total of 400000 people visiting
Thailand
in 2013.
This
was
also
the highest amount of yearly holiday in the
four-yearyear
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four-year year
four-year-year
span.
Greece
's total sum of visits made to the country fluctuated largely through the four years. Beginning in 2010, the total amount of visits by UK
travellers
stood at 2.5 million.
This
rocketed to slightly under 4.5 thousand visits in 2011.
Then
in the following
year
,
this
figure
dropped massively, to around 1.800thousand. ,
Finally
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by 2013, the total amount of UK tourists visiting
Greece
increased to 300 thousand visitors, a million below the total
figure
of tourists to
Thailand
.
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