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Some people think that the best way to gather information is through newspapers while others believe in other better ways. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is a debatable discussion among people that, which is the best way to get
information
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. It is often thought that
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news
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papers
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 are the best medium to gather
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in
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some
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other alternatives. I firmly believe that
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news
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papers
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outdated
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out dated
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outdated
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compared
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compared
 to other modern mediums like
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 Television,
news
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 portals and other online mediums.
Recent
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 days, tremendous changes happened in the way we communicate and gather
information
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. Earlier it was done only by printed
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medias
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 and it is a widely accepted source of
information
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 nationally as well
internationally
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as internationally
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.
News
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 from different streams
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 given in
daily
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the daily
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news paper
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,
for example
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,
news
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 and updates about sport,
economic
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, health and developments. In spite of, its wide range of acceptance, it got outdated by some other modern technologies. Modern ways to get informed are more accepted because of
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 speed and convenience. We need to wait for another day to know
further
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 updates
in contrast
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 online
news
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 portals, Television
news
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 portals and other online resources are communicating fast with live updates.
Secondly
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money
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the money
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 we spet
for
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on
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news
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papers
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are
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 reduced by modern facilities.
More
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over
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through networking we get
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access
acces
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access
 to different sources of
information
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 at a time with less effort and
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expense
expence
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expenses
 in comparison with printed media within a fraction of
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second
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of
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the monotonous reading,
news
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 channel provides
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 with the support of audiovisual data. To conclude,
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even though
eventhough
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even though
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news
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 put a legacy in the path of gathering
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, other advanced ways
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 better.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • in-depth analysis
  • specialized journalists
  • tangible
  • traditional approach
  • real-time updates
  • instant access
  • multimedia elements
  • interactive graphs
  • diverse opinions
  • first-hand accounts
  • comprehensive view
  • accessible
  • information distribution
  • consumption
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