Stress is now a major problem in maby countries around the world. What are some of the fact in modern society that causes this stress and can we reduce it.

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Stress
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is a major
problem
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globally. It is not merely an emotional reaction but
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has physiological effects,
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as raising blood pressure, increasing adrenalin, and worsening many medical conditions. It
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causes and aggravates psychological disorders
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as depression, anxiety, and
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schizophrenia
among others. For these reasons
stress
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is a serious
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and effort is required to reduce the burdens that cause it.
Stress
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around the world is not equal. Reasons for
stress
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may
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differ
differe
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differ
in developed and developing countries, but one universal cause of
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is money. Money, or lack of it, in poor
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means parents are struggling to put food on the table and to provide a healthy environment for children to grow up
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is a big factor
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stress
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and the solution is for governments and charities to provide better financial aid for people in need.
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, in the
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most citizens are stressed about money due to frivolous spending, credit card debt and expensive habits. The solution to
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problem
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is through financial education and advice. Another reason for
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can be ill health, especially in countries with poor healthcare. The solution to
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problem
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is
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requires improvement in healthcare, meaning building new hospitals, community centres, pharmacies etc.
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is expensive and slow and requires major government backing.
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, another reason is work. Working in an environment
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not optimised for humans, causes include working in mines
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or using vibrating machines
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as diggers, can cause great
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. Solutions for
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include an evaluation from an occupational medicine expert and following his advice. In conclusion,
stress
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is a
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and can be caused by a wide variety of reasons, some of which have easy solutions, while others require huge investment and time.
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