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Some People think that exercice is the Key to health, white others feel that having a balanced diet is more imrortant. Discuss both sides an give your opinion

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Some
People
 think that exercice is the Key to health, white others feel that having a balanced diet is more imrortant. Discuss both sides an give your
opinion
 One part of
people
 say exercice is the Key to health. The reaeons for
this
opinion
 are different. Some of the
people
 have always done
sports
. They grow up with
sport
. Every family member has been active in
sports
. Everyone goes to
sports
. They have fun!
Sport
 is everything for
this
 group of
people
. Some persons were ill. They had an accident or other illness.
Sport
 was a chance (opportunity) to get healthy and a more flexible
body
. Other
people
 wanted to lose weight.
This
 is one
way
 to achieve the goal. These group of
sport
 say:
Sport
 is healthy. Those who exercise regularly train their physical fitness and appearance. They support the immune system, heart and circulation. It stabilizes your musculoskeletal system and prevents diseases
such
 as diabetes, osteoporosis and hardening of the arteries
On the other hand
 – another group of
people
 have the
opinion
 - the most important thing is the
food
. For the healthy look at
food
 the whole time. They count calories, don't eat carbohydrates, he
last
 dinner is at 6 pm or rather, they only eat once a day. A lot of rules are excitant. The scientist say nutrients carbohydrates, proteins and fats
as well as
 vitamins, minerals and water have many different functions in the
body
. They support the
body
 with vital substances every day, give energy and ideally keep you healthy and fit. An important point is that
food
 affects the health of tomorrow. Healthy foods boost our mental productivity. The others make you tired and sick. In the
last
 years Germany is getting fatter and fatter. Some points that can stop
this
.
For example
: • The right
food
 keeps your healthy. • good
food
 keeps your healthy. • if you are eat healthy, you don't need to diet • healthy eating motivates • Eating healthy promotes sleep and performance These are two extreme sides of the subject of
sport
food
. I think the best
way
 is the
way
 of the middle.
Sport
 is good in combination with a healthy eating. In my
opinion
 they
way
 between the both extremely sides is the best
way
. Our
body
 needs
sports
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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