In many countries, the increase in life expectancy means that people have to work until they are older to help pay for their retirement. An alternative is for people to start work at a younger age.   Do you think this alternative would be a positive or negative development?

Working means we doing a job and get a salary for our living. it is good for us to think about our future. I think it is
positive
Add an article
a positive
show examples
development for
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
peoples
Fix the agreement mistake
people
show examples
who want to get a job from their younger ages. Because
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
peoples
Fix the agreement mistake
people
show examples
can
savings
Replace the word
save
show examples
their money and
do
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
not give
a
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
compliment
to
Change preposition
apply
show examples
their parents.
Submitted by serlyayus on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Get your IELTS Essential Vocabulary List —
Topic Vocabulary:
  • life expectancy
  • retirement savings
  • career prospects
  • lifetime earnings
  • workforce adaptability
  • innovation and productivity
  • stress and fatigue
  • long-term productivity
  • education and skill development
  • qualified workforce
  • economic growth
  • personal development
  • early career start
  • social skills
  • national economy
What to do next:
Look at other essays: