Crime is a big problem in the world; many believe that nothing can be done to prevent it. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your own opinion.

Crime is unquestionably one of the prevailing and worrying aspects of any
society
. Crime prevention can be executed in two ways,
firstly
through a noble presence in
society
and
secondly
through international contribution. I do believe there is a lot which must be done by the government and individuals. On the one hand, by and large, nations must provide enough police force to handle criminals and monitor activities in surrounding areas.
For example
, authorities must have a budget to apply new technology for surveillance, by putting cameras in all sensitive places,
for instance
, shopping malls, public places, restaurants, and streets to cease criminals.
Secondly
, every country must have a law to buy dangerous equipment with only a licence.
Although
, many countries allowed
people
to buy without a licence.
This
is the main cause of increased crime all over the globe.
Thirdly
, criminals must be punished strictly, and have prevention and deterrent effects for all age groups.
On the other hand
, to my mind, the overwhelming majority of
people
tend to participate in government to decrease crimes and keep safe their societies. Many believed individuals cannot protect
society
from crimes. I disagree with
this
statement because
people
make
society
and our responsibility to participate with the government to retain crimes in our
society
and save our young from any heinous and atrocious activity.
However
, it is not easy but we must work out, how we make possible
this
. To conclude, in order for a
society
to be a safe place to live in, all
society
members including the governments and
people
must take necessary measures to keep it a crime-free place.
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