Some people think that men and women have different qualities, therefore certain jobs are suitable for men and others for women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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improved their position in society. It took a
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of process for gender equality to be approved. In
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topic and
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discuss to
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what extent
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agree or disagree. First of all,
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are
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are totally different from each other.
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known to be masculine and
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for the family.
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, they are the ones who do the construction
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because of their strength. Not only
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require several
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jobs they are fit in when it comes to
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,
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are the strength of
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family. Another
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quality
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that they are good at is
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of one nation.
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the
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they are more practical and
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their emotional state.
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,
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gained a
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of reputation when it comes to working. Unlike before,
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are not allowed to work or study. But in recent
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a
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they can work in any field that they want to.
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a
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of
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now can be in
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Industry, they can do
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coding,
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and networking
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before only
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do. In conclusion, I agree that
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and
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have different qualities, especially when it comes to jobs. In whatever kind of work they want to be part of, there will be no problem as long as they always do their best.

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task achievement
Make sure your introduction clearly states your opinion. Instead of saying ‘to what extent I agree or disagree,’ be direct about your viewpoint.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use clearer topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph. This helps readers know what each paragraph is about.
task achievement
Add more examples to support your ideas, especially about women's roles in different jobs. Specific examples strengthen your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Use connecting words like ‘firstly’, ‘secondly’, 'in addition', or 'on the other hand' to make your writing flow better.
content
You have shown a good understanding of the topic and provided some examples about both men and women's roles.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender roles
  • inherent qualities
  • social dynamics
  • merit-based selection
  • advancements in technology
  • levelled the playing field
  • gender stereotypes
  • equal opportunities
  • physical differences
  • workplace
  • evolving
  • traditional view
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