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Some people think that teachers should be responsible for teaching students to judge what is right or wrong so that they can behave well. Others say that teachers should only teach students academic subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In recent years, statistics indicate that parents are increasingly concerned about school education. Some believe that
schools
 should shoulder more responsibilities to help
children
 build their value system while others argue that
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school is merely a place for learning
knowledge
. In
this
 essay, I will elaborate on both views and give my opinion at the end. Admittedly, imparting
knowledge
 is an essential role of
schools
. Teachers and
children
 should fully utilize the venues and facilities of
schools
 to their best given there is only limited school time. Discussion of other unrelated social issues is regarded as irrelevant and undermines students' academic performance.
In addition
, many teachers are unqualified to explain issues that are beyond the scope of their
knowledge
 as it may appear to be misleading to youngsters. 
For example
, it may come as a challenge for mathematics teachers to explain why
children
 should obey traffic rules.
However
, helping
children
 to develop correct mindsets and a sense of value is
also
 important.
For instance
, many trainers are affecting
children
's behaviours unconsciously and have a long-lasting influence on them. In
such
 a scenario, taking up the responsibility to assist
children
 and help them differentiate between rights and wrongs is necessary. More importantly, along with the social development,
schools
 are entitled to the partner meaning, which means they need to do more to help
children
 become socially responsible. Personally, I believe
schools
 should be a place where
children
 learn theoretical
knowledge
 due to the fact that
many
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 educational personnel does not receive enough training for teaching life lessons. In Conclusion,
schools
 are places for students to learn both
knowledge
 and life lessons.
However
, passing on
knowledge
 to students is the main duty of
schools
.
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