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It is a good idea to have large public spaces in towns and cities such as parks and squares. Do you agree or disagree? Why?

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There has been a controversy about whether
cities
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 should have those large public spaces,
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 as parks and squares. I would say it's necessary, and my reasons will be explained in the following paragraphs.
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 and foremost. Those large public spaces can propel the
city
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's economic development. As we know, shopping malls are always located in the
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 centre; they represent the
city
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's capacity to a large extent.
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, if there is a well-known shopping mall in a certain
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,
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 the publicity of
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city
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 is bound to increase, and it will attract more tourists.
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,
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city
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 can better develop. It's worth mentioning that shopping malls are extremely vital for some small
cities
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 or towns than megacities. Those big
cities
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 have already reached their bottlenecks, but for some small towns, it's a great opportunity to develop by building some shopping malls.
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, it's a good chance to establish a particular culture in the
city
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. Take New York as an example. NY is famous for its time square, which can represent more than a single square.
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, it can give tourists a feeling that NY is the
center
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 of the world at their
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 glance, on account of numerous billboards in time square and all the skyscrapers. In
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 case, a large public space can exert an influence on people's minds.
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, it's advantageous to our bodies. Due to the growth of the human population, more people tend to live in
cities
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;
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, the number of cars will increase. As we know, a park has a lot of plants, like trees and flowers. They can absorb carbon dioxide and produce oxygen through photosynthesis. In conclusion, the merits of having large public spaces outstrip its demerits.
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • community engagement
  • mental well-being
  • physical activity
  • social interactions
  • aesthetic appeal
  • biodiversity
  • urban congestion
  • air quality
  • communal activities
  • environmental benefits
  • green spaces
  • urban heat islands
  • sense of belonging
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