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With the increasing use of mobile phones and computers, fewer people are writing letters. Some people think that the traditional skill of writing letters will disappear completely. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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these traditional skills could not find
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people
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, employer
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 they have to write it again.
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 are hard to read. But when you are typing these
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 to send their official letter rather than posting
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.
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. With the technology development, they can send
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 response without waiting. In conclusion,
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compared to
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 in future.I strongly agree with the statement
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considering
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 over the decades.

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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