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It is often claimed that electronic devices will soon replace paper books. Do you agree or disagree?

#devices #paper #books
In
this
 modern world, more and more high technologies have been developed for our
life
. Some original and traditional items have already changed forms into electronic from paperwork just like
books
. As far as I am concerned,
although
 there are some drawbacks to
people
 using tablets or smartphones to read
books
, I still believe that
paper
books
 will disappear from human
life
 in the future. Spending too much time using electronic devices will bring some bad effects on
people
’s health.
Although
 the screen can provide colourful and various pictures or information, it
also
 can hurt
people
’s eyes at the same time. Compare with
paper
books
, the tablet is easier to get tired of human eyes because of the light from the screen. It is obvious to see the age of
people
 who start wearing glasses is drop significantly, especially happened in children. Electronic devices actually improve human
life
 and make many things become more convenience. In the past,
people
 who wanted to read
books
 need to rent from the library or purchase from the store. And now, plenty of resources on the internet provide readers download electronic
books
 or articles from websites. Another reason is that book which is made with
paper
 and is easy to destroy,
people
 do not have to worry about
the
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e-book that needs to be protected. Due to earth's environmental issues, trees are limited on our planet and human should cut off them as less as possible. To sum up,
paper
books
 are reducing a lot than before. For me, electronic devices will appear in human
life
 very often in the future but there are some disadvantages that still need to prevent and deal with.
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