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Some students work while studying. This often results in lacking time for education and constantly feeling under pressure. What do you think are the causes of this? high tuition fees supporting family What solutions can you suggest? grants , scholarships , apply for less courses in each semester

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These days, the issue of working and studying together is a widely debated matter. some people have thought that being capable of bearing own expenses while studying is a good habit. while others believe that it can badly affect the student's academic achievements. I believe that
students
 should
focus
 on one purpose at a time and do their best in their studies so they can be expert professionals in the coming future.
To begin
 with, the study takes a lot of effort and time
however
,
students
 still
work
besides
 studying.
Firstly
, they
work
 to pay their high tuition fees and to give financial support to their family .
Secondly
, some
students
work
 to grab some working experience parallelly so, they can get a better salary after completing their degree.
For example
, medical
students
 usually have so many exams and stress but they still
work
 to pay their college fees and financially support their families.
Moreover
, today's
students
 are professionals of tomorrow so government and individuals should help them financially so they can
focus
 on studying and get better in their field.
this
 can be done by giving grants and giving scholarships to needy
students
.
furthermore
,
students
 should be given exemptions on their education loans.
hence
, they will make more
focus
 on their studies. To conclude, few
students
focus
 more on jobs
besides
 their studies and
this
 is mostly seen because of financial problems. so society and government should help to reduce
this
 burden and help them give grants and scholarships for their education fee. and
this
 will lead to giving better professionals in the coming future
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