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Some people believe that professionals such as doctors and engineers should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Some
people
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 think that
doctors
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 or
engineers
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 have to work in the
country
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 where they were educated, while others disagree with
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. In my opinion,
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 should be free in choosing their living place.
People
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 have a right to live wherever they want to. It is not fair to force
people
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 to live in a
country
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 where are not interested because they finished higher education there in some specific fields like Engineering or Medicine.
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, in some developing
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, some young
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 and
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 are willing to immigrate to developed and rich
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 in order to gain high-paid jobs. They are more motivated and determined to effort in the hope of getting job promotions.
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, in
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 way they improve their quality of life.
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, some
people
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 believe
doctors
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 and
engineers
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 have to work in a place where educated because of some reasons. In some
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, there are some public universities which do not have tuition fees. They only accept the top and extraordinary candidates. These universities are supported by governments and citizens' taxes.
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, some citizens believe that students should serve in that
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 in order to compensate for the government's financial support. Because of
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 reason, in some
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,
doctors
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 are obliged to work in the education place for some years. They usually serve in deprived and remote villages. To sum up, there are different opinions about working in the
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 where
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 and
engineers
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 did their training. In my view, they should not be forced and governments should provide good job situation in order to encourage them not to leave that
country
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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