Some peopl think young people should be free to choose their jobs but other people their think they should be realstic and think more about future.  Discuss both view and give your opinion.

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Nowadays young folk find trouble when they have to select their
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which is become a controversial issue. Some
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that youngsters have
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to choose any
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while others believe that they should select their
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to be
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realistic way. On the one hand, many
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are in favour of selecting
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job
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freely because they think
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satisfaction is more important than
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security.
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Youngster
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The youngster
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should choose a
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which they find comfortable and easy
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work
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.
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may help them to concentrate more on
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which may lead to a successful career and happy
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. To be more specific, when a person
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happiness
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, they
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not any kinds of pressure including mental or physical, resulting in their personal
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will be
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happier. For
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reason, young blood should select their favourite
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freely.
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, others believe that young
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should focus more on
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job
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so that they can progress
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life
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in future. Young folks should choose a
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which
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a big wage and can earn more
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to develop their daily lifestyle. Put simply, If they select a
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, they can find
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to maintain their daily
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.
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Because
ultimately
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have
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the power to lead a modern
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. The more
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you have, the more beautiful your
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will be. In my opinion, young blood should think about their future when
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a
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. Because
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in
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earth to live a beautiful and
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life
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. For doing
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,
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people
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have to earn
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of
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which
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their
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beautiful and happier ultimately. For examination ple, if a person
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less
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, he/ she can’t fulfil his personal or families all demand.
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can become a reason
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inquietude on
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the family
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. So, I personally think that young
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should choose a
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where they can earn more
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. To sum up, choosing
favourite
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a favourite
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job
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can give satisfaction
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work
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, but
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a big
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salary
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salary
can give progressive
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. So,
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satisfaction is important
on
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work
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but
job
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secure
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is more significant
on
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in
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life
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.
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