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Computers are being used more and more in education. Some persons say this is a positive while others argue this is leading to a negative consequences

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The
use
 of electronic means of learning is becoming more frequent. Some
people
 say
this
 has a positive impact, while others argue that
this
 will bring about negative consequences.
This
 easy will discuss both points of view On one hand,some
people
 argue that
this
 means of learning might be detrimental for the following reason. the
first
 reason is
a
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distraction, most persons get distracted when using
this
 means of learning because of pops that interfere with the learning process
this
 might lead to poor academic performances during exams not only
this
,
this
 method of education limits the direct assessment of students by lecturers
this
 is a major setback in the
use
 of
this
 methodology of learning. With regard to the frequency of
use
 of computers as a means of learning, some
people
 believe
this
 has a positive effect for several reasons.
Firstly
, it makes learning easier
this
 is so because
people
 can now have access to different universities online without having to be there physically
this
 is
also
 known
also
 know as long-distance learning
furthermore
this
 has
also
 helped to bridge the gap in learning between the developed world and developing world.
Secondly
, because the internet is a global village which has a lot of information the more frequent
use
 of computers as a means of learning will enable students to have the technical know-how on how to get these pieces of information and makes research work easier it
also
 helps provide visual aid of leaning. In conclusion, while there are arguments for and against the frequent
use
 of electronic means of learning. In my own ,opinion I believe the benefits outweigh the negative consequences as
this
 method of learning makes it easier and gives us access to more information and bridges the gap in terms of knowledge between the developing and developed world
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