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We live today in an electronic information age. It is easier to be connected by technology yet many people seem to no closer to feeling happy in their lives. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, technological advancement enabled us to stay connected with
people
 from other parts of the world. Even though
communication
 has never been easier, many
people
 believe that it does not improve their level of happiness. In
this
 essay, I will explain two main reasons why our way of communicating does not increase our happiness.
To begin
 with, human responds better to physical
interaction
.
Communication
, for
human
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humans
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, is more than just exchanging information
to
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 each other. Gestures, mimics, and expressions are
also
 important parts of
interaction
;
however
, a conversation by phone or text messages eliminated these factors. With face-to-face
interaction
, there are more things involved and both parties are more engaged
to
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 each other. Clearly, in-person
communication
 is better than virtual. Another important reason is technology
disconnect
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 us from
people
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the people
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 around us.
For example
, most
teenager
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teenagers
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 nowadays
prefer
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 to talk about their problem to their social media friend rather than to their parents.
As a result
, parents may lose connection
to
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 their own children, and soon they are going to see each other as strangers.  In conclusion,
communication
 has never been easier due to modern technology.
However
, I believe that virtual
communication
 is not an ideal way for
human
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 to communicate.
Therefore
, I think
people
 should keep virtual conversation to a minimum and engage more in face-to-face
interaction
.
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