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We live today in an electronic information age. It is easier to be connected by technology yet many people seem to no closer to feeling happy in their lives. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, technological advancement enabled us to stay connected with
people
 from other parts of the world. Even though
communication
 has never been easier, many believe that it does not improve their level of happiness. In
this
 essay, I will explain why I agree with the statement supported
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 two arguments.
To begin
 with, human responds better to physical interaction.
Communication
, for humans, is more than just exchanging information with each other. Gestures, mimics, and facial expressions are
also
 important parts of conversation;
however
, a conversation by phone or text
messages
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 eliminated these factors. With face-to-face interaction, there are more things involved and both parties are more engaged with each other. Clearly, in-person
communication
 is better than virtual. Another important reason is technology disconnects us from the
people
 around us.
For example
, most teenagers nowadays prefer to talk about their
problem
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 to their social media
friend
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friends
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 rather than to their parents.
As a result
, parents may lose connection with their own children, and soon they are going to see each other as strangers. It is obvious that the more we connect with
people
 virtually, the more distance we have
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 our surroundings. In conclusion, connecting with each other is not as hard as it used to be.
However
, some
people
 think
this
 improvement does not lead to a happy life. I agree with
this
 opinion because virtual
communication
 is not an ideal way for
human
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 to interact with each other.
Therefore
, I think society should keep virtual
communication
 to a minimum and engage more in face-to-face interaction.
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