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privet school is better than public school,do you agree or not

#privet #school
Firstly
 education means teaching and learning, usually at
school
, college or university. In England when children become four
years
 old, they have to go to
school
( in all of the country children have to go to
school
 but the age at which children go to
school
 is different).In fact, before four
years
 old going to
school
 is optional. From year
one
 until year six, we are in primary
school
 after these
years
 all students go to senior
school
 when they finish these
years
 we can find a job for doing or we can continue. Some people want to continue, maybe you think after senior
school
 what will they do? They go to university. Some students want to have a job and they want to continue their education(i think
this
 work is very beautiful). Now you think if some students have not got much money to pay to
school
, what will they do? In all of the country, we have got two types of
school
, the
first
one
 is a privet
school
(we have to pay money for
school
)and the
second
one
 is a public
school
. Maybe you think which
one
 is better. I think primary
school
 is better than public
school
 because teachers teach better than in public
school
 but if you have not got any money, do not worry, public
school
 is ok. In point of my view, if we want to create our future, we have to educate or when you educate very well, most people will like you and you will have many friends
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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